I REALY NEED HELP

[sun_light]

السلام عليكم جميعا
انا اريد مساعدة ان امكنكم ذلك
انا طالبة بالجامعة وطلب منا دكتور اللغة الانجليزية كتابة موضوع والموضوع عبارة عن مقارنة لحياتي بين الان وخمس سنوات مضت
المهم انا كتبت الموضوع بس قصير اريد منكم تقييم الموضوع واي اقتراحات استطيع اضافتها للموضوع

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Comparing and contrasting yourself now with yourself 5 years ago

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Year after year human get many changes in his life, some thing change make life better but some change
make life worse. Last five year in my life, get many changes.

Many changes happened In my personality side , before five year I was not married but from three years ago I married a wonderful man he is very genteel and kind , after year from our married I have got very beautiful girl "Sara" that is my daughter name ,she is my real treasure . The worst thing happened to me in last five years that I lose my grandmother and that was very sad.

In my education side many changes happed for the better in last five year I decides to improve my knowledge in computer so I toke many courses in computer ,I learn many new languages in computer language for example I learn oracle and visual basic language ,also I toke many courses to improve my English language. The real important change was continuing my studied in the university.

As result for improving my skills in computer, programming languages, the company where I work decided to increase my salary from 400 KD to 800 KD and that was a good thing for me also the company decide to make me the head of the programming section.

Many things in human life get change to best or to worse but the most important thing is to learn from these changes to improve your life.

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مع جزيل الشكر

[أم صالح]

;) First hi sister how are you
here some mistakes are not correct


السلام عليكم جميعا
انا اريد مساعدة ان امكنكم ذلك
انا طالبة بالجامعة وطلب منا دكتور اللغة الانجليزية كتابة موضوع والموضوع عبارة عن مقارنة لحياتي بين الان وخمس سنوات مضت
المهم انا كتبت الموضوع بس قصير اريد منكم تقييم الموضوع واي اقتراحات استطيع اضافتها للموضوع

******************الموضوع****************************************************

Comparing and contrasting yourself now with yourself 5 years ago


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Year after year human get many changes in his life, some things change make life better but some change(you can say : Some of those changes make our life better but other don't

or you can say : Year after year many things change in our life, some

of those ......, )


make life worse.
Last five years in my life, got many changes(many things had changed ).



Many changes happened In my personality side.Before five years I was not married but from three years ago I married a wonderful man. He is very genteel and kind . After year from our married I have got very beautiful girl "Sara" that is my daughter name .She is my real treasure . The worst thing happened to me in last five years that I lost my grandmother and that was very sad because she was very close for me
(its better if you write my gradndmother died not lost because you grandmother is not thing she was a human ).

In my education side many changes happened for the better in last five years I decided to improve my knowledge in computer so I took many courses in computer ,I learn( I have learned ) many new languages in computer language. For example I learned oracle and visual basic languages ,also I took many courses to improve my English language. The real important change was continuing my study in the university .

As a result for improving my skills in computer, programming languages, the company where I work decided to increase my salary from 400 KD to 800 KD and that was a good thing for me also the company decided to make me the head of the programming section.



Many things in human life get change to best or to worse but the most important thing is to learn from these changes to improve your life.Other thing we have to learn it that we hav don't stop at the first step if we got dispointed

but we have always to complet the way and do what we want.

I wish all my coming years to be good and many dreams come true
.

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مع جزيل الشكر
that is it !!:33:
sorry i dont have now ideas to add it to your writing
i will think more
i wish i could help you .:أفكر: :أفكر:

you are good but you need to improve you writing like you are improved in Computer :biggthump :biggthump :o
good luck
:) :)
i wish other can help you too .:o :o

[Another_One]

hiii sister

i think u don't have gramatical mistakes

and it is good to let ur teacher make a look at it before u gave to him/her


Hope ur writing skill get better soooooon

[TRY NO RACE]

Comparing and contrasting yourself now with yourself 5 years ago

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Year after year, humans get many changes in their life ,on the one hand some changes make life better but on the other hand some changes make life worse . for the Last five years many things had changed.
some of those changes happened on my personal side . before five years I was not married but right after two years I married to a wonderful man. he is very gentle and kind with me . after only a year from our marriage we have got a very beautiful girl and we named her "Sara" , she is my real treasure in life.
The worst thing that ever happened to me in the last five years was the loose of my grandmother ,that was very sad for me, and it took a while to get over it.

on my educational side , many things changed for the better in the last five years. for example, I decided to improve my knowledge in computer so I took some courses , I learnt new programming languages in computer like Oracle and Visual Basic languages . I also took many courses to improve my English language . every little step i took it really helped me alot but The real important change was continuing my study in the university.

As a result for improving my skills in computer programming languages and English , the company which I work for hah decided to increase my salary from 400 KD to be 800 KD per month , and that was a real fantastic thing for me .
also the company decided to make me the manager of the programming section.

Many things in human life get changes whether for the better or for the worse but the most important thing is to learn from these changes how to improve your life and how to get a better one.




corrected and added.....but still not sure :(
that was all what i could done sister
wish you all the best
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أم صالح
thanX alot my sister for correcting and helping here,,,im sure that yours is better than mine
thanX

[sun_light]

شكرا لكم جميعا يكفيني مروركم الكريم على موضوعي