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مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : A Cry In The Night



Toboe
27-08-2005, 02:05 AM
inspiration struck again and this was what i came with
I'm not sure about the title...i might change it when i think of a better one
before you read:
if you want, you can start reading and think of yourself as this person in this piece..and see how you would feel
enjoy :أفكر:



As the shadows of the night fly everywhere

And the sound of life has vanished in the darkness



There you are, wandering in this sea of blackness

Only hearing your own wounded heart's beat



As your wounds get wider and wider

You can't see blood but the pain is growing stronger and stronger



Silent tears fall down your burning cheeks

Yes, you let them fall..

And then, who would notice them?



Can't find your way

Lost…

Your body can't pull through anymore

Weak



You feel your breath getting heavier and heavier..



Tripping with a dead body lying on the ground…

Your eyes are widening

Frightened



This once strong body of yours collapses on this dead land

Knowing there's only death flying in this ominous sky



Empty of all memories of happiness

Only images of sorrow creeping into your mind



Realizing you're alone here

Every hope of surviving is drifting away

You know the end of this misery is coming…



Moments later

A loud cry rises in the air

Announcing the end of another life


Toboe

Lips Licker
27-08-2005, 05:40 AM
Beautiful
the way you put it was beautiful
specially the ending



Empty of all memories of happiness

Only images of sorrow creeping into your mind

Realizing you're alone here

Every hope of surviving is drifting away

You know the end of this misery is coming…


thank you very much
Keep it up sis

psx-ps3-ps3-ps4
27-08-2005, 05:41 AM
Hi dear sister
How are you?

Incredible ......
So nice.......
Very very Dark.......

I don't know which one suite your poem the most , but the one thing that I'm

sure about is that your poem is unbleavible , amazing ,and one of the best

poems I've ever read.

You are very talanted
You chose the right words and the right expresion

And when it comes to expres sorrow and pain you are unstopable

You know while I was reading your masterpiece I imagened your well-made scene
It was very dark , really

It was like watching an oscar-winning movie

Well....., even if I keep typing for a handred years , it does not matter
Because I can not describe how much I liked your poem

So,


Thank you very much sis

And I can not wait to read another poem from you


God bless you


Bye

Toboe
28-08-2005, 07:35 AM
Beautiful
the way you put it was beautiful
specially the ending

I'm glad you liked it :D




thank you very much
Keep it up sis
Thanks for taking time to pass by




Hi dear sister
How are you?

I'm great..hopefully you too :)



Thank you very much sis

Thank you for reading it


And I can not wait to read another poem from you

when inspiration strikes again :09:


God bless you
Bye


you too, see ya
:ciao:

mkspeed
28-08-2005, 04:59 PM
:biggthumpit's realy nice i wish u put more like that and thx

Toboe
29-08-2005, 07:46 PM
:biggthumpit's realy nice i wish u put more like that and thx


Thanks for reading it :D