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مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : leave me alone



~*RoSaMaRia*~
18-01-2006, 02:38 PM
leave me alone



I was thinking that every body loves me …



Cannot taste the life without me…

Until that day came ….

That disappointing day ….

When I discovered that nobody even looks at me..

They were just pretending…

Yes, all the time they were pretending….

And what about me ….??!

I was completely blind….

With my pink dreams and pure intentions…

I was silly and stupid…

How could I believe them..??

I ‘d prefer to live alone in the hell than to be surrounded by liars !!!

There is nobody faithful or honest ….

They are all devils instead of angels

They don’t deserve even one tear from me …

What I really need now is to close my eyes and forget them …

But how did I discovered that or how could I prove it ??..

Do not ask me !!

Because exactly at this moment my spirit is leaving my body!!!!!!

what do you think about it ??was it good

the swan lake
19-01-2006, 08:16 PM
you are a good writer
thanks for sharing that with us

keep going dude

Mr.FMZ
19-01-2006, 11:44 PM
جميل ماخطت أناملك أختي
وبصراحة أجمل شي فيما كتبتي العاطفة اللي ظاهرة بجلاء سواء كانت غضب ولا حزن. معك حق هناك أشخاص الواحد يندم على كل دمعة يذرفها لأجلهم. الله لا يكثرهم في حياتنا.
أما نقدي فرأيي ان فيه هناك بعض الجمل لبعض المبالغات لو صيغت بشكل آخر كانت أفضل مثل
"they are all devils instead of angels" هذي الجملة لو بينتي بطريقة ما انه رأيك ولا خففتيها يكون أحسن. أكرر هذا رأيي الخاص.
شيء أخير .. استمري في وضع جديدك واحنا بالانتظار.

~*RoSaMaRia*~
20-01-2006, 03:15 PM
thank you all
mr.fmz
special thank for your valuable advices
jina maria

Nnoshah
20-01-2006, 09:51 PM
Thanx for this nice topic
:biggthump

great

Dark Gamer
20-01-2006, 10:02 PM
This Poetry Is Very GoOOoD :D


GoOOoD Work SiS :biggthump

~*RoSaMaRia*~
21-01-2006, 10:35 AM
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