Immortal In Death - Poem

[DarkLordDragon]

السلام عليكم و رحمة الله و بركاته... قصيدة بسيطة كتبتها باللغة الإنجليزية تحت عنوان


Immortal In Death

Nobody can hear my shouts and screams...
In this world I lost all of my hope and dreams...

Nothingness, world of darkness, where am I...
I turned around and thought this might be lie...

Serpants and dragons bite me day and night...
Yet I survive and I know something is not right...

I have no strength to move a finger anymore...
I am supposed to be dead and no more...

Tons of huge rocks being thrown on my head...
I wish it's the end and I hope I am dead ...

I can see angels and they are killing me again...
I am dead, I die again and again yet alive I remain...

I believed for immortality there will never be a portal...
Surprisingly enough, in the end I've became immortal...

I finally figured out where I am, 6 feet under the ground...
Where only darkness and soldiers of god roam around...

Yeah I died before and I am already dead, it's life after death...
God made me a special immortal, the immortal in death...

DarkLordDragon

[mr.small]

Wow ... did you wrote all by yourself ? :D fantastic ,expecting more ... and .. ahh. can tech me some ? :09: .. see ya

[shahroora]

Its realy nice topic..you have good style in writting
Thanks and waitiing more

[Angel Tears]

Saaalaaaaam

wounderfull words..and the imaging of the angels with awarness of being immortal of death..just shut me down.. and i stand with high and pride..this is a rare style..you have to go on.so we`ll be thursty of more words from you

and take care

c ya

[Lips Licker]

This is definitely one of
the best poems I've ever read

[Toxic Rain]

this is a great poam that warns us of what might happen in the afterlife

great job :top:

[DarkLordDragon]

Hi guys n_n

Mr. Small:

Wow ... did you wrote all by yourself ? fantastic ,expecting more ... and .. ahh. can tech me some ? .. see

I am glad you liked the poem, I wrote it myself and I was expecting for a better writing but as you can see I need to revise some of my grammars but what to do this is all I can come up at the moment, as for teaching I really don't know how to teach because I only select words and gather them in one sentence n_n


Its realy nice topic..you have good style in writting
Thanks and waitiing more

Inshallah if there is any idea and time I will be writing but at the moment don't expect anything from a lazy guy like myself n_n


Angel Tears:

Saaalaaaaam

wounderfull words..and the imaging of the angels with awarness of being immortal of death..just shut me down.. and i stand with high and pride..this is a rare style..you have to go on.so we`ll be thursty of more words from you

and take care

و عليكم السلام

I am glad you liked the poem n_n thanks alot for your supporting words I really appreciate it, I am hoping to be better in writing in English and inshallah I will improve my writing skills, thanks again Angel Tears for passing by and posting a comment...


Lips Licker:

This is definitely one of
the best poems I've ever read


Now this is too much for me, if I have confiednce in myself I could convert your words into that of the supportings but I am still not there but Inshallah one day I will write better poems. Still your words makes me happy and gives me the courage to post more of these poems




Toxic Rain:
this is a great poam that warns us of what might happen in the afterlife

great job

That was one of the main reason behind the poem, I must do better job in describing yet I am not that good but I will do it one day inshallah, thanks so much Rain and hope to see you again

See you later

[Toboe]

nice
what's great about it is that you chose an important topic to write about
really nice
hope to read more from you :biggthump

[DarkLordDragon]

nice
what's great about it is that you chose an important topic to write about
really nice
hope to read more from you :biggthump


Thanks brother, I am glad you like it, I will try to write more but as you know my speciality is not in this section but I am trying to visit different sections of the forums n_n anyway thanks for your comment and see you around...

[:: HiDEY ::]

Assalamu 3alaikum..
MashaAllah ... Dare I speak ?
your rhyming is great .. the poem is so passionate and well written .. I applaud you !

[xToOotax]

great poem..

i bet there s bright future waiting 4 u my friend^^

keep on the hard work..

c ya^^