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مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : Tear Drop Story



:: HiDEY ::
30-07-2006, 05:28 PM
:: Salaam everyone::
This is a poem I wrote exactly one year ago ... Go easy on me I know im no poet and this isn't something breathtaking ... this is just a humble poem of 4 chapters ...

:: This is chapter one ::
This is chapter one .. if you like it I will gladly post the rest ... give me the proper support and criticism ... and correct my mistakes if you find any ...

::here we go::



Tear Drop Story

Chapter One …

The story





A tear drop,

Held inside of me

Since the day our eyes first met



Please don't look at me with those eyes

Every time you give me one simple look

I melt inside



Boiling contacts...

Warm feelings...

Sweet talks...

Started it all

Why did it have to end like this?



This coldness and this strange feeling

The feeling of something,

Killing me on the inside

Crying for help

In need of your being

Desperate for you

Your love,

Warmth,

And kindness

Desperate for you



I love you, I love you, I love you

Please, don't leave me

I need you, I need you, and I need you

Please, don't you ever let go of my hands

I miss you, i miss you, and I miss you

Why did you have to leave?

Why did you leave me here?

All alone

In the shadows of a soon to be faded away love



I can still remember you saying

Be strong when things fall apart

Honest… that broke my heart





And that one tear I was holding

The day u lightened up my whole life

Is now out

But its not just a tear drop

Not just a river

Not just a see

Not just an ocean



Leaving me with 45 years of memories

Memories that will be held in my mind

And locked inside of my none-beating heart



Goodbye, goodbye, goodbye

This word I never got to say

My dearest, I love you

I will miss your warmth and sweet love

Till the day I face my destiny

And die

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End of chapter one

mr.small
31-07-2006, 07:48 AM
wow .. its realy beautiful .. I liked it so much

I did know you have all that skills & imajnation

send chapter 2 quiqly I tell ya I cant wait to read it

?say .. is it possipol that Iam the one who you mean in the peom

:09:

:: HiDEY ::
31-07-2006, 10:49 AM
:: Mr,Small ::
God only knows who I mean ... and don't be so greedy .. you are my twin and the one i mean in the poem ... I don't think so ..I like having you as my twin way better !!
::thanks for passing by ::

:: HiDEY ::
31-07-2006, 10:50 AM
And what dou you ppl think of my new signature ?? is it good ? hmm

مستر حريقة
31-07-2006, 11:12 AM
Very well sister

But a poem like this needs some rhymes to be just perfect

Thank you alot

keep it up

N R

mr.small
31-07-2006, 09:06 PM
o.k I get it twin

:biggthump ohh you signatur is realy beautiful .. babies I love babies

? :09: and ... could tech me some

:: HiDEY ::
31-07-2006, 11:33 PM
:: Mr.Small ::
thanks for complimenting my signature .. kilik nithar ;) and wat do you want me to teach you ?I didnt get what you mean !
:: Later , dude! ::

mr.small
01-08-2006, 08:23 AM
:09: hehee .. I was kiding about that

and I ment the peom

never mind

see ya twiny

mr.small
01-08-2006, 08:29 AM
:12: :p and ahh ... dont you think it is time for chapter 2

:biggthump I think we all liked chapter 1 very much

? :33: :09: or have you lost your tilint

:: HiDEY ::
01-08-2006, 10:56 AM
::mr.small::
thank you for your enthusiasm
here's chapter two


Chapter two

Mixed up, emotional …



And after I set my tears free

And dried the well inside of me

After u sucked the blood

And life away from me

And abandoned me

So violently

And mercilessly

I tell you, my ever lasting love

My sunshine

My rain

My air

My everything



I hate everything about you

I hate it when you look at me...

Because it burns me for a while

And then everything fades away

Because it's when I realize you're looking at her





I hate your smile

Because it only lasts for seconds

And then

I see you turn your face

And smile at her



What does she have that I don't?

Do you think she'll ever treat you as good as I do?

My prince,

No one will ever be as loyal to you as I am



As I stair at your pictures

I cry,

Melt,

Freeze.

And smile

I hate you,

Why do I still love you?



You were the only one, who gave me butterflies,

You made me float

You gave me the moon, and the stars

I gave you my life

I gave you my love

I gave you my soul

I gave you my heart

That will never make us even



Getting even will have me to rip your heart

Out of your chest,

And place shattered pieces of rock in place



I love you,



The distance kills me,



Please, come back to me



Bring me back to the real world

Where it's only me and you

And 45 years of memories

45 years of happiness,

45 years of joy,

45 years of innocence

45 years of true love





True love that was unbreakable,

True love that was so strong,

And faced all kinds of storms

And still was strong



How could she have the heart to steal you away from me?

How could you have the heart to sell me out?

And replace me just as easy!





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Note: I will be away from home and the internet for a couple of days or through the weekend .. I might not be able to post any replies you have chapter 2

::thanks::

Amanda~
05-08-2006, 12:42 AM
Hi nice poems i like theme
ur words r clear and gentle
thank u
keep it up

:: HiDEY ::
06-08-2006, 12:06 AM
:: Blue_Gaya ::
Thanks you for passing by
:: Take care ,Sweetness ::

zxcmagdasd
06-08-2006, 12:32 AM
wow really wow

you can't belive how those words touched me
:wow:

spider girl
06-08-2006, 01:07 AM
what a great poem!! really

i like so much..& i think if keep writing in that way..with some focus on the rhyming..sure your poems will be more beautiful next time

:biggthump keeeeep up ur gd work
hope to c more of ur great words soon

:D ByeBye

:: HiDEY ::
06-08-2006, 02:08 AM
:: ZXCMAGDASD ::
Thanks for stopping by and sharing you're thoughts
:: Spider girl ::
I apreciate you're kind openion .. stay tuned for part 3 and 4 .. and keep the comments going
::thank you all ::