مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : What I left behind
Kubaj
18-02-2007, 03:20 AM
Greetings brothers and sisters.. this is what I would like to name as "a sleepy guy's scribbles
An Innocent tear from a boy's shattered dream
in a world once good and pure
, now terrible and obscure.
I'm a faceless entity without a heart,
an echoing sigh in the bottomless well of despair..
exiling our souls apart.
True feelings of friendship and love were left behind,
oh how sad I am now that I've realized that I was so blind.
Falling into the void of emptiness..
I surrender to the cruel serenity of coldness.
For all what I've left behind
My soul from all is denied..
مستر حريقة
18-02-2007, 05:44 AM
My soul from all is denied..
Nice sweet words brother
Thank you so much
;) Looking forward to hearing more from you
N R
:: HiDEY ::
19-02-2007, 10:25 AM
Oh, this is so sad
I loves the vocabulary
selections in this poem
Thank you , and keeo it up
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dream catcher
20-02-2007, 05:41 PM
This is very good
i have a question if i may ask
?Is this your writing
Kubaj
21-02-2007, 03:03 PM
Thanks mates, I appreciate your presence..
and Dreamcatcher.. yes I wrote this.
:: HiDEY ::
21-02-2007, 04:41 PM
Thanks mates, I appreciate your presence..
and Dreamcatcher.. yes I wrote this.
You are welcome
O__O WHAT ?? You wrote it
Are you sure
Mashallah ... Very nice
Falling into the void of emptiness..
I surrender to the cruel serenity of coldness.
Simple breath taking words
If I was to evaluate this on a scake if 1 to 10
I would give you a million and ten
Kubaj
21-02-2007, 06:00 PM
To be honest I think I've wrote better, this is probably the first time I tried to make a writing for me rhyme.. although not that great but I liked some parts of it.
I'll try and write a better on in the near future.
dream catcher
21-02-2007, 06:50 PM
Maan, don't underestimate yourself
as far as i'm concern...this is very good
if this is your first time...then you're even better than I thought
you've got the talent man
And I would really like to read more of your writings
I mean ...if thats possible of course
Kubaj
22-02-2007, 03:10 AM
Although there isn't much to show off, I always aim to be modest..
and sure I can send you some if you like.
wa7da_7afla
23-02-2007, 02:46 AM
Greetings brothers and sisters.. this is what I would like to name as "a sleepy guy's scribbles
An Innocent tear from a boy's shattered dream
in a world once good and pure
, now terrible and obscure.
I'm a faceless entity without a heart,
an echoing sigh in the bottomless well of despair..
exiling our souls apart.
True feelings of friendship and love were left behind,
oh how sad I am now that I've realized that I was so blind.
Falling into the void of emptiness..
I surrender to the cruel serenity of coldness.
For all what I've left behind
My soul from all is denied..
nice words
i like your poem >> strong words Void of emptiness wow
Falling into the void of emptiness
keep it up
Kubaj
24-02-2007, 10:56 PM
Thank you, I appreciate your nice words.
princee10
07-08-2010, 08:44 AM
thank u very much
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