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مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : Something I Wrote A Long Time Ago When Sadness Killed Me """ Lost Soul """



VaSh ThE sTaMpEdE
24-03-2007, 12:56 AM
Hello everyone, I'm a person who loves to write poetry both in arabic and english. A long time ago, I was in deep misery and I wrote this poem. Ofcourse I doing good now, It was just that at that time I had a lot of pressure on me. Well , Here you go :



Lost Soul

SomeTimeZ Life Izn't For EveryOne
So I'll Just Wait Till Die Lookin At The Sun
I Know I'll Leave Loved OneZ Behind
But Its Better Than Hearin Me Whine
Living A Hellish Life Izn't What I Wanted
So Much Pain Made My Heart Corrupted
I'll Put I Smile On My Face Till The Die
But Still I'll Keep Asking MySelf " WHY "
Why Waz I Born ?
EveryDay Hurts Me More , Its Like My Body Iz Torn
Trying To Communicate With People In This Strange Life
I Think My Only Way Iz Using A Knife
From My Experience I Found Out The Death Iz The Only Escape From Life Issues
Why Should I Kill MySelf Trying To Fit In , Its Only Makes Me Wet More Tissues
Madness , Anger , And Hate
Guess In This Life , Its My Only Way Through The Gate
SomeTimez I Wish I Waz Dead So I Won't Be Here
But The Problem iz , Death Iz SomeThing People Fear
Should I Stop The Flowing Of These Emotions Inside Of Me And Go All Out ?
Will There Be Some1 To Help Me If I Shout ?
What I Hate Most About This Society To Not Being Accepted
WherEver I Go , Mostly I'm Rejected
I Keep Asking MySelf What Are My AmbitionZ ?
Being Cool , Happy , Or Just A Proud-Self-Man Who Talks Like Strange PoliticianZ ?
In This World I Coudn't Find AnyOne Who Understands Me
So I'll Be With MySelf And Be Some1 I Wanna Be
I'm Surprized That I Still Didn't Find The Meaning Of Pain
Even Though In This Life , Its Somthing Everyday I Gain
I'v Did So Many Mistakes When I Waz a Kid
These Mistakes Made Me Feel Like S***
I Regreted Doin Some Stuff , And Not Doin Some Stuff


:) so what do you think ?

cya !:biggthump

dream catcher
24-03-2007, 10:48 AM
Looks like you had some really bad days...and I mean really bad days to write something like this


anyway its too dark and depressing
but other than that...its a good poem

VaSh ThE sTaMpEdE
24-03-2007, 06:50 PM
lol yah i know
but that was a long time ago, i even forgot that i wrote this, I found it when i was organizing my computer :D

thanks for the reply , Take Care !

:: HiDEY ::
25-03-2007, 08:29 AM
:: Hello ::
I liked the poem too
Your vocabulary selection was fine
Your ideas and emotions were very obvious
:: My Advice ::
Next time you type something out
Try not to use CapS AnD TyPe LiKe THiS So MuCh
It makes the reader
:: DiSTANT ::
Try to type this way, The way you were tought to
at school or at university .. The formal way
So, When you post it on discussion boards
They will look serious
:: One more thing ::
Please, Don't use abbreviations
And read the English Forum Rules
:: Awaiting more astonishing words from you ::
Good luck

VaSh ThE sTaMpEdE
25-03-2007, 04:54 PM
thanks for the advice. And forgive me I didn't read the forum rules.
Take Care ! :biggthump

wa7da_7afla
02-04-2007, 03:24 AM
SomeTimeZ Life Izn't For EveryOne
So I'll Just Wait Till Die Lookin At The Sun
I Know I'll Leave Loved OneZ Behind
But Its Better Than Hearin Me Whine
Living A Hellish Life Izn't What I Wanted
So Much Pain Made My Heart Corrupted
I'll Put I Smile On My Face Till The Die
But Still I'll Keep Asking MySelf " WHY "
Why Waz I Born ?
EveryDay Hurts Me More , Its Like My Body Iz Torn
Trying To Communicate With People In This Strange Life
I Think My Only Way Iz Using A Knife
From My Experience I Found Out The Death Iz The Only Escape From Life Issues
Why Should I Kill MySelf Trying To Fit In , Its Only Makes Me Wet More Tissues
Madness , Anger , And Hate
Guess In This Life , Its My Only Way Through The Gate
SomeTimez I Wish I Waz Dead So I Won't Be Here
But The Problem iz , Death Iz SomeThing People Fear
Should I Stop The Flowing Of These Emotions Inside Of Me And Go All Out ?
Will There Be Some1 To Help Me If I Shout ?

Being Cool , Happy , Or Just A Proud-Self-Man Who Talks Like Strange PoliticianZ ?
In This World I Coudn't Find AnyOne Who Understands Me
So I'll Be With MySelf And Be Some1 I Wanna Be
I'm Surprized That I Still Didn't Find The Meaning Of Pain
Even Though In This Life , Its Somthing Everyday I Gain
I'v Did So Many Mistakes When I Waz a Kid
These Mistakes Made Me Feel Like S***

I Regreted Doin Some Stuff , And Not Doin Some Stuff








nice poem ! but don`t be so hard on your self ...or were you

What I Hate Most About This Society To Not Being Accepted
WherEver I Go , Mostly I'm Rejected
:02:

i hate that the most too...
i know exactly how you feel

the idea of death in your poem is what i didn`t like

maybe you want to fix some of the things in that poem to make it perfect.

but nice poem after all ...let`s see more :D of that dark side

VaSh ThE sTaMpEdE
02-04-2007, 03:44 AM
Thanks a7la_wa7da for your reply



nice poem ! but don`t be so hard on your self ...or were you


Thanks , as i said before i wrote this peom a long time ago
even when I read it now I am like " wow I can't beleive i was like this before "

Take Care ! :biggthump

lynda
14-06-2007, 06:16 PM
WoW , god you wer realy realy depressed
will am happy that your well now and for
your poem i realy lihed it good job

VaSh ThE sTaMpEdE
14-06-2007, 06:21 PM
thx ! , well ppl go through odreals every now and then ;)

رجل من الماضي
20-06-2007, 03:17 PM
lol yah i know
but that was a long time ago, i even forgot that i wrote this, I found it when i was organizing my computer :D


thanks for the reply , Take Care !


Oh my Gush

What happen man
you look so unhappy in these words
TKt easy man
"apre:D la plui le beau temp"



nothing worth it just throw it behind

always look at
al la niha2ya wa ma b3daha :D

VaSh ThE sTaMpEdE
20-06-2007, 06:16 PM
al la niha2ya wa ma b3daha :D


hahahaha , thanks man :09: