What Crossed My Mind

[blue_eyes]

Hi everyone ,when I was relaxing on my bed ,some words

had crossed my mind ,so I decided to share it with you ,but
I think from the first look you will say what is this hurting

topic ,but what shall I do ,so I hope you to read it carefuly and I want your opinions about it:

caution : this is my first try to write:02:
plz dont be shy to write your comment:biggthump

baby,you have changed my life
coz that I am still a live
first time you said hi
I got shy
I didnt what shall I do
shall I said hi again
or I have to ask you repeat it twice
from first look I said
this is the lost
but well I found it
I've traveled with my heart
all over the hearts
but like you I didnt find
I feel ,I was in the heaven
there is a sinless angel
but for the taken pity
I got a cozen seems a heavy
she was a daemon
not like a diamond
this is a special thank
coz it's the best hank
I learned how to be alertness
not to be illness
I have a light heart not a bad part
so this is my last goodbye
and plz never say hi

[katsumi san]

It's pretty good as a start
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there is a missing word in this sentence

I didnt know what shall I do
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indeed ''what croossed your mind'' is nice
thanks for sharing brother blue eyes
^^

[Amal Sayed]

Asslam Alikum,
You are right sister
it is a nice try for a start
I think you still should work on yoru spelling a little...

Thanks for sharing though

[blue_eyes]

It's pretty good as a start

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there is a missing word in this sentence


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indeed ''what croossed your mind'' is nice
thanks for sharing brother blue eyes
^^

thanks a lot Katsumi san
this is a nice encouraging

[blue_eyes]

Asslam Alikum,


I think you still should work on yoru spelling a little...

Thanks for sharing though

my best thanks to you for this note
and I will work hard to do well

thnkx again

[:: HiDEY ::]

Hello there
I think this is an OK start .. once you try harder and work on your language
you will get to accomplish more
Best of luck