Angel

[aliveZombie]

alsalm alekom once again
here's another peace of writing
I really hope that you would enjoy it
and I'm hoping that you would correct me if i made any mistakes, anyway here it goes...

ANGEL

An angel came down from heaven
Free from defects,
Took over all my emotion
And my thoughts and hopes.

Words are not enough to describe the beauty,
The mind can't assimilate the purity
When you are mum, heaven strum’s the purest piece
And when you talk, symphony serenade's in every place.

Excuse me but, I can't reach the sky
If I only could have wings so I can fly
Contrition and hesitation is what is holding me
So let’s leave it to what it`s meant to be.

[dream catcher]

Simple and beautiful
good work
welcome to the English forum, amigo

[metal Z]

very nice

i realy like it..especially this part

"And when you talk, symphony serenade's in every plac"

i love it

thanks bro ... and keep up

C ya

[aliveZombie]

thank you so much my friend Dream Catcher
for welcoming me and I'm really Glad for coming

and Z Metal i'm extremely Happy for your response
thank you once again

[Amal Sayed]

Asslam alikum
nice one alivezombie, keep up

[aliveZombie]

thank you Amal
I'm happy tha you liked it

[blue_eyes]

...


ANGEL


An angel came down from heaven
Free from defects,
Took over all my emotion
And my thoughts and hopes.


Words are not enough to describe the beauty,
The mind can't assimilate the purity
When you are mum, heaven strum’s the purest piece
And when you talk, symphony serenade's in every place.


Excuse me but, I can't reach the sky
If I only could have wings so I can fly
Contrition and hesitation is what is holding me
So let’s leave it to what it`s meant to be.


hi aliveZombie

indeed this is a nice idea and awesome way to have

but could I have a seen

I think your poem should be longer ,to let the reader have a full idea about what you have

As an example:
describe more your angel(what you aim to)
describe more your feelings

pardon broth. aliveZombie

your broth. blue_eyes

[aliveZombie]

hi blue eyes
thank you for your your Idea ..... Indeed, I found it correct and true,I have mistaken by making my poem short and brief, while there should be no limits in words to describing my angel , I should rewrite it once again


thank you brother