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مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : The Light Wraps You



Foxy.Rabbit
25-12-2007, 10:25 PM
this is a poem by Pablo Neruda, he's from Chile
so the poem is originaly written in Spanish


but I found the English version, and translated it ...since I have a final exam next week


which will include some litrary texts for sure, so I thought this should be good


if you're interested, the poem is from his book "twenty love poems and a song of despair" and this poem is called "En su llama
mortal"




English version


The Light Wraps You


The Light wraps you in its mortal flame
Abstracted pale mourner, standing that way
against the old propellers of the twilight
that revolves around you


Speechless, my friend
alone in the loneliness of this hour of the dead
and filled with the lives of fire
pure heir of the ruined day


Abough of fruit falls from the sun on your dark garment
The greatest roots of night
grow suddenly from your soul
and the things that hide in you come out again
so that a blue and pallid people
your newly born, takes nourishment


Oh magnificent and fecund and magnetic slave
of the circle that moves in turn through black and gold
rise, lead and possess a creation
so rich in life that its flowers perish
and it is full of sadness




Arabic version


يحتضنك الضوء


و يحتضنك الضوء في لهبه الفاني
واقفةً, حزينة, شاحبه و مجردة في الطريق
في وجه مراوح الشفق القديمه
التي تلتف من حوّلك


لا أجد الكلمات صديقتي
أعيش العزلة و حيداً في ساعة الموت
مليئاً بدفئ النار
أتلقى نصيبي من هذا اليوم المنحوس


يسقط غصن فاكهة من طرف ثوبك الدامس الظلام
و جذور الليل المتأصلة
تنمو فجأة من روحك
ككل شئ يختبئ فيك ليعود للظهور من جديد
حتى يتسنى للشعوب المريضه الباهتة اللون
أبناءك الجدد, أن يتلقوا رعايتكِ


أيتها المملوكة الرائعة الجذّابة الخصبة
من بين دوّامة من الدوائر الذهبية و السوداء
اظهري, قودي و امتلكي الخلق
غنية في حياةٍ ورودها فانية
و الحزن ملئ زواياها



ok, I have to say that some parts made no sence to me
but I tried as much as I could


anyways, comments are really appreciated
:)

Amal Sayed
26-12-2007, 10:59 AM
Asslam Alikum
nice poem foxy
I can see what you mean about some parts doesn't make sense to you
but that is the issue in translatig poems to other langugae
it just lose it's beauty

thanks a lot

Foxy.Rabbit
26-12-2007, 12:05 PM
thanks Amal,

I didn't want to change the whole poem, I tried as much as I could to make it make as much sense as possible ...


but that is the issue in translatig poems to other langugae
it just lose it's beauty

any suggestions? ...I just couldn't find reasonable equivalence ...really, if you have any I would really love to read 'em



thanks for passing by,
foXy.

dream catcher
26-12-2007, 01:48 PM
The whole poem is confusing..
I don't seem to get it!!

anyway, one comment..

Good luck with your exams
!!

anasserge
26-12-2007, 04:00 PM
peace every body
hi foxy
the poem is fine but the translation must be revised ..i suggest to make
a section for the poems and there translation
goobbye

Foxy.Rabbit
26-12-2007, 04:29 PM
dream catcher


!! may god listen from you
:D
and yea, its more than confusing ...but I though it's worth a try





anasserge


I didn't quite get what you meant, but I agree on the revising part



gracias a todos

مستر حريقة
28-12-2007, 08:12 AM
I wish you good luck in your exams
:ponder:

? The poem
:D

I liked the sense in it
:flute:

Foxy.Rabbit
29-12-2007, 06:16 PM
I wish you good luck in your exams

:ponder:








thank you

!


? The poem
:D


!! I swear to God it's a poem ...A POEM
:(

.

.

:09:



I liked the sense in it




:flute:





oh well, glad you found something
to like
:silly:


thank you

MustafaMM
31-12-2007, 12:23 AM
Foxy LOL
I don't know why but this nickname reminds of a very funny
Anime character >>> well I believe I got so far away from our main point

Well the poem is good & the translation too
but honestly talking? I didn't quite like some part
I mean what's this guy, from a slave to a leader of the creation??

Don't you find him weird??
by the way, if you like poem then mine
I wrote it a few months ago
it's called "My Bleeding Flower" hope you like it
Your opinion is considered professional....

Keep the good work up

Mustafa

Foxy.Rabbit
01-01-2008, 07:37 PM
Foxy LOL


I don't know why but this nickname reminds of a very funny
Anime character >>> well I believe I got so far away from our main point



shipped off to the compliments department
:D





Well the poem is good & the translation too
but honestly talking? I didn't quite like some part
I mean what's this guy, from a slave to a leader of the creation??
Don't you find him weird??
by the way, if you like poem then mine



umm .. look I truely believe the guy had something to say, and probably did say it, I think it's just a cultural thing .. he's from the other part of the world .. and speaks spanish .. it's a really difficult language to understand when it comes to poetry .. I don't know but I think he wasn't weird


!!



I wrote it a few months ago
it's called "My Bleeding Flower" hope you like it
Your opinion is considered professional....



I'll check out later



Keep the good work up


:ponder: