My First Scary Short Story

[FREEDOM GIRL]

Hi everybody
This is my first Scary Short Story
I hope you like it
:p:p:p




Scary Short Story
"The Calling Voice"





It's always keep happening to me, it's always keep
happening. What's Anna, what?, "said Isabel". I just can't tell you Isabel, I just can't. Why? I am your best friend from the high school until today, we never hide things from each other, right!, "said Isabel". Ok, listen I don't have time to tell you the whole story but everyday in the middle of the night exactly at 12 o'clock. They keep coming. Who?, "said Isabel". Ok, sorry I will go now please forget it, bye. No Anna! Please tell me? I am your best friend and I will help you, "said Isabel". Well, you can't, everybody think that I am crazy and I am starting to loose my mind. Trust me Anna, trust me, "said Isabel". Ok Isabel, It all started when I was 8 years old, me & my family moved to a new house in the small village of Sheffield, the house was very beautiful from out side but the hell was inside. The hell, Sorry, What?, "said Isabel". Yes the hell Isabel, In the beginning I heard footsteps coming down the hall. Then, I started to hear some voices calling my name Anna wake up, wake up. When I heard these voices I screamed and ran into my parents and told them what happened but they both laughed and said 'oh it's just the wind honey, now go back to sleep'. So, I went back to my room crying to find an ugly man and two little girls with him standing in the corner. I blinked in horror but every time I blinked they got closer. I screamed, MOM, DAD help me please. The ugly man smiled at my face and said they can't hear you,,, you are mine now,, hahahaha. Then I heard a loud voice calling my name Anna wake up its time for school.





The End:أفكر::أفكر:



Freedom Girl

[MiSs.ChiPs]

hahaha realy i like the unexpected ending


am your best friend from the high school until today, we never hide things from each other, right!,
I love this part cause it ,that what a real friendship

it's really important to have someone to reveal to him whatever we feel
we find this friend beside us every time either when we are happy or in pain

,in my opinion it's really a very good beginning
the title and plot are amazing

I hope it the first but not the last
keep it up

and We waiting 4 more ..

[FREEDOM GIRL]

wo0o0o0o0o0o0o0ow
I am very very very very happy because you like it. you are really amazing . you know why,,,, because I have alot of things I write it in english and I will put it inshallah. Thank you very very very much. You make me really happy. I promise you I will write more

[Levana]

alsalamo 3lekom :09:,,


its nice seeing you here ^^,, and we would
love to read more of your stories



am your best friend from the high school until today, we never hide things from each other, right


this part was too Arab for me ,, do you read English stories?? x


i think it would help a bit if you do



and said they can't hear you,,, you are mine now,, hahahaha. Then I heard a loud voice calling my name Anna wake up its time for school.


:biggthumpi'm not satisfied with the ending i think you could do better


...~


i enjoyed reading your story ^^ ,, waiting for you next topic


:D

[Sander]

I liked the part where Anna starts describing how the ugly guy and the two girls kept getting closer and closer as she blinked.

Nice story, you’re English is pretty nice as well, you should develop it,
you can start by Levana’s advice, read more and, eventually, you’re English will improve.

Thanx and good luck.

[dream catcher]

I agree with Levana and Sander in two particular notes

am with Levana that the end felt a bit cliche

and with Sander about the "tense" feeling in that part of the story

as a whole, I would say its a bit too short

post more
:)

[FREEDOM GIRL]

THANKS EVERYBODY
NICE 2 SEE U HERE

[Ambitious Heart]

well done dear.. ur story such a pretty with full of emotional words,,,..
u have to improve ur skill in writing, coz who knows u gonne be a great writer some day..

wish u all he best>>
||"" cya..