am i good!!

Hi every body

Here a poem i wrote and want to have your comments please.


Rose alone in the dark, trying to find the peace of mind,

Thinking of future, today and past, what I have to do with that!

Am I leading the w wisdom way, or am I lost in a path so dark!

Confused in thoughts, ill in body and my mind so up and down!

Some body tells me, what to do! How to live in peace, in calm!

How to avoid feeling the dark touching my life, ruining it harsh!

How to not affect my mind with thoughts so ugly, so dark!

To feel happy or feel bad, it’s not the way I should think about!

Because running after that is just like running after car

You’ll never reach it though you try

Like happiness you seek to find

But in fact, it's just some thing goes in rush

Maybe today, maybe tonight or maybe the moment you just find!

Then, you cry, you feel down and maybe never turn the way you are!

Because sometimes, you spend long time, searching the thing you wish you have!

Troubles come and troubles go and you struggle so hard

The goal is near, and you so zeal but always things never go the way you wish!

The thing you dream of, just you’ll have it. Now and forever you’ll be so fine

No more sadness, no more tears. The day has come to new your life

Yet, you realize fact so hard but indeed so true though harm

The dream you think will change your life will make you happy, will make you fly!

Is like that but for short time, then it goes and you end up just dreaming of its back!!

أوف كورس يو أر قود;-)

والله كلمات حلوة ومعبره وتحس إنو اللي عاملهم مسويهم بإحساس عالي مو أي كلام

ياريت أختي تستمري على هالمستوى وتقدميلنا كل فتره مواضيع حلوة زي هذي :-) :-)

Thank you Cathy

شكراااااااااااااا كتير كتير AJ وانشالله ولا يهمك :-) :-)

وشكرا على التعليق قوت القلوب :-)

العفو أختي كاثي وأنا في إنتظار المزيد :-) :-) :-)

Like your poem!
Sound so cute… keep it up
You are doing great! :-)

i almost read your word ....but i stel don't feel what is wrong
is it me or my fear .....that my english aint no clear
or ist you trying to be cool ......rushing your mind to get the groove
i'm not trying to be so crool .....or suggest you aint but a fool
why you need to be so coold ....while you have a diffrent door
find the words cuz its gold....and do it agin but this time make a storm
i think you need to find the tool....that make your heart starts to glow
i'm not saying go seak a lover .....or find a life in the night under cover
its your life or what to do ....all i wish is the best for you ?:

nice words & sensetive
It is a good if it was the first start to U in writing
I hope to U the best in the future
and if U have more let us see them

Ok

:)