اخواني طلب قراء قطعتي من 5 سطور . وتصحيح بعض الاخطاء البسيطة .. بس .. ممكن اخواني

السلام عليكم ..
:ciao:
اخاوني .. عندي طلب بسيط جدا .. ما بياخذ من وقتكم الثمين 5 دقائق .. ولجأت لمنتداكم .. لأن ما قصرتوا معاي ف اخر مرة

عندي قطعة كتبتها .. واكيد اخطائها كثير ة.. لأني ف السنة الاولى ف الكلية .. والمدرس طلب موضوع ف الماضي عن مشروع قمت به

ولا زم ارفع الملف .. بكره
وهو بسيط بس محتاج لتصحيح منكم

ف الجرامر .. و الفكبوري

النص :
In the last year I opened my first shop his name al Sammha Computer Center. I opened in my village.
I opened in my village because there aren't any computer shops and because I have experience and I need got other income sources. The good and the special in the center you can fix computer in your home and you can by telephone if the problem small. Because the anther shop don’t fixed by telephone because he can't got money by telephone. About the money I bayed tow cars (Land Cruiser) and I buy a small car (Toyota corolla). I think it's very successful because the first shop in the village and there are many people used computer.
Ali could you give me your advice about my first business. It's very important for my.

حاضر اخوي انا باكتب التصحيح بالخط الاحمر و الغيت بعض الاشياء

اقتباس:

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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة aseerUAE

the last year I opened my first shop its name was al Sammha Computer Center. I opened in my village.
I opened in my village because there aren't any computer shops and because I have experience and I needed other income sources. The good and the special in the center you can fix computer in your home and you can by telephone if the problem small. Because the other shops don’t fix by the telephone because he can't get money by telephone. About the money I payed tow cars (Land Cruisers) and I bought a small car (Toyota corolla). I think it's very successful because the first shop in the village and there are many people useing computers.
Ali could you give me your advice about my first business. It's very important for me.

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اتمني اني اكون ساعدتك

hunter-zero

اشكرك الف شكر .. اخوي

ما قصرت وجزاااااك الله الف خير





اشكرك

العفو اخوي

the last year I opened my first shop its name was al Sammha Computer Center. I opened in my village.
I opened in my village because there aren't any computer shops and because I have experience and I needed other income sources. The good and the special in the center you can fix computer in your home and you can by telephone if the problem small. Because the other shops don’t fix by the telephone because he can't get money by telephone. About the money I payed tow cars (Land Cruisers) and I bought a small car (Toyota corolla). I think it's very successful because the first shop in the village and there are many people using computers.
Ali could you give me your advice about my first business. It's very important for me

اقتباس:

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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Beneton

the last year I opened my first shop its name was al Sammha Computer Center. I opened in my village.
I opened in my village because there aren't any computer shops and because I have experience and I needed other income sources. The good and the special in the center you can fix computer in your home and you can by telephone if the problem smallbecause there aren't any computer shops . Because the other shops don’t fix by the telephone because he can't get money by telephone. About the money I payed tow cars (Land Cruisers) and I bought a small car (Toyota corolla). I think it's very successful because the first shop in the village and there are many people using computers.
Ali could you give me your advice about my first business. It's very important for me

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last year I opened my first shop which name is sammha computer center.i opened in my villege because there is no computer shops , i have experience and i need other income sources.I think the best thing in using the center you can fix computer in your home by telephone if the problem small but other shops dont do that because they cant get money by the telephone
والباقي صح وانشاء الله تكون استفد ومع احترامي للمصحح السابق لكن هذا التصحيح اصح

اقتباس:

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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة aseerUAE

السلام عليكم ..
:ciao:
اخاوني .. عندي طلب بسيط جدا .. ما بياخذ من وقتكم الثمين 5 دقائق .. ولجأت لمنتداكم .. لأن ما قصرتوا معاي ف اخر مرة

عندي قطعة كتبتها .. واكيد اخطائها كثير ة.. لأني ف السنة الاولى ف الكلية .. والمدرس طلب موضوع ف الماضي عن مشروع قمت به

ولا زم ارفع الملف .. بكره
وهو بسيط بس محتاج لتصحيح منكم

ف الجرامر .. و الفكبوري

النص :
In the last year I opened my first shop his name al Sammha Computer Center. I opened in my village.
I opened in my village because there aren't any computer shops and because I have experience and I need got other income sources. The good and the special in the center you can fix computer in your home and you can by telephone if the problem small. Because the anther shop don’t fixed by telephone because he can't got money by telephone. About the money I bayed tow cars (Land Cruiser) and I buy a small car (Toyota corolla). I think it's very successful because the first shop in the village and there are many people used computer.
Ali could you give me your advice about my first business. It's very important for my.

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In the last year I opened my first store which I called Al Sammah Computer Center. It was opened it in my village 'cause there weren’t any other computer stores in the area. And 'cause I think I have enough experience and income sources to do it. We offer a technical assistants, and a free phone assistant to those whom has a small problem in their computer.

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About the second part, sorry man I didn't help you cause I couldn't figure out what are you trin' to say exactly
بالعربي : النص الثاني, نصيحه -_- لو بترسله لاحد لاترسل, صراحه ماعرفت اصححه لاني مو عارف وش تبي تقول بالضبط فيه :blackeye: