What I left behind

Greetings brothers and sisters.. this is what I would like to name as "a sleepy guy's scribbles

An Innocent tear from a boy's shattered dream
in a world once good and pure
, now terrible and obscure.

I'm a faceless entity without a heart,
an echoing sigh in the bottomless well of despair..
exiling our souls apart.

True feelings of friendship and love were left behind,
oh how sad I am now that I've realized that I was so blind.

Falling into the void of emptiness..
I surrender to the cruel serenity of coldness.

For all what I've left behind

My soul from all is denied..

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My soul from all is denied..

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Nice sweet words brother

Thank you so much

;) Looking forward to hearing more from you

N R

Oh, this is so sad
I loves the vocabulary
selections in this poem
Thank you , and keeo it up
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This is very good

i have a question if i may ask

?Is this your writing

Thanks mates, I appreciate your presence..
and Dreamcatcher.. yes I wrote this.

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المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Kubaj

Thanks mates, I appreciate your presence..

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and Dreamcatcher.. yes I wrote this.

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You are welcome
O__O WHAT ?? You wrote it
Are you sure
Mashallah ... Very nice

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Falling into the void of emptiness..
I surrender to the cruel serenity of coldness.

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Simple breath taking words
If I was to evaluate this on a scake if 1 to 10
I would give you a million and ten

To be honest I think I've wrote better, this is probably the first time I tried to make a writing for me rhyme.. although not that great but I liked some parts of it.

I'll try and write a better on in the near future.

Maan, don't underestimate yourself

as far as i'm concern...this is very good
if this is your first time...then you're even better than I thought
you've got the talent man

And I would really like to read more of your writings
I mean ...if thats possible of course

Although there isn't much to show off, I always aim to be modest..
and sure I can send you some if you like.

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Greetings brothers and sisters.. this is what I would like to name as "a sleepy guy's scribbles

An Innocent tear from a boy's shattered dream
in a world once good and pure
, now terrible and obscure.

I'm a faceless entity without a heart,
an echoing sigh in the bottomless well of despair..
exiling our souls apart.

True feelings of friendship and love were left behind,
oh how sad I am now that I've realized that I was so blind.

Falling into the void of emptiness..
I surrender to the cruel serenity of coldness.

For all what I've left behind

My soul from all is denied..

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nice words
i like your poem >> strong words Void of emptiness wow

Falling into the void of emptiness




keep it up

Thank you, I appreciate your nice words.

thank u very much