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الموضوع: Something I Wrote A Long Time Ago When Sadness Killed Me """ Lost Soul """

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    Something I Wrote A Long Time Ago When Sadness Killed Me """ Lost Soul """

    Hello everyone, I'm a person who loves to write poetry both in arabic and english. A long time ago, I was in deep misery and I wrote this poem. Ofcourse I doing good now, It was just that at that time I had a lot of pressure on me. Well , Here you go :

    Lost Soul

    SomeTimeZ Life Izn't For EveryOne
    So I'll Just Wait Till Die Lookin At The Sun
    I Know I'll Leave Loved OneZ Behind
    But Its Better Than Hearin Me Whine
    Living A Hellish Life Izn't What I Wanted
    So Much Pain Made My Heart Corrupted
    I'll Put I Smile On My Face Till The Die
    But Still I'll Keep Asking MySelf " WHY "
    Why Waz I Born ?
    EveryDay Hurts Me More , Its Like My Body Iz Torn
    Trying To Communicate With People In This Strange Life
    I Think My Only Way Iz Using A Knife
    From My Experience I Found Out The Death Iz The Only Escape From Life Issues
    Why Should I Kill MySelf Trying To Fit In , Its Only Makes Me Wet More Tissues
    Madness , Anger , And Hate
    Guess In This Life , Its My Only Way Through The Gate
    SomeTimez I Wish I Waz Dead So I Won't Be Here
    But The Problem iz , Death Iz SomeThing People Fear
    Should I Stop The Flowing Of These Emotions Inside Of Me And Go All Out ?
    Will There Be Some1 To Help Me If I Shout ?
    What I Hate Most About This Society To Not Being Accepted
    WherEver I Go , Mostly I'm Rejected
    I Keep Asking MySelf What Are My AmbitionZ ?
    Being Cool , Happy , Or Just A Proud-Self-Man Who Talks Like Strange PoliticianZ ?
    In This World I Coudn't Find AnyOne Who Understands Me
    So I'll Be With MySelf And Be Some1 I Wanna Be
    I'm Surprized That I Still Didn't Find The Meaning Of Pain
    Even Though In This Life , Its Somthing Everyday I Gain
    I'v Did So Many Mistakes When I Waz a Kid
    These Mistakes Made Me Feel Like S***
    I Regreted Doin Some Stuff , And Not Doin Some Stuff

    so what do you think ?

    cya !

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    Looks like you had some really bad days...and I mean really bad days to write something like this

    anyway its too dark and depressing
    but other than that...its a good poem

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    lol yah i know
    but that was a long time ago, i even forgot that i wrote this, I found it when i was organizing my computer

    thanks for the reply , Take Care !

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    :: Hello ::
    I liked the poem too
    Your vocabulary selection was fine
    Your ideas and emotions were very obvious
    :: My Advice ::
    Next time you type something out
    Try not to use CapS AnD TyPe LiKe THiS So MuCh
    It makes the reader
    :: DiSTANT ::
    Try to type this way, The way you were tought to
    at school or at university .. The formal way
    So, When you post it on discussion boards
    They will look serious
    :: One more thing ::
    Please, Don't use abbreviations
    And read the English Forum Rules
    :: Awaiting more astonishing words from you ::
    Good luck
    التعديل الأخير تم بواسطة :: HiDEY :: ; 25-03-2007 الساعة 08:32 AM سبب آخر: Rephrase something

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    thanks for the advice. And forgive me I didn't read the forum rules.
    Take Care !

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    رد: Something I Wrote A Long Time Ago When Sadness Killed Me """ Lost Soul """

    اقتباس المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة VaSh ThE sTaMpEdE مشاهدة المشاركة




    SomeTimeZ Life Izn't For EveryOne
    So I'll Just Wait Till Die Lookin At The Sun
    I Know I'll Leave Loved OneZ Behind
    But Its Better Than Hearin Me Whine
    Living A Hellish Life Izn't What I Wanted
    So Much Pain Made My Heart Corrupted
    I'll Put I Smile On My Face Till The Die
    But Still I'll Keep Asking MySelf " WHY "
    Why Waz I Born ?
    EveryDay Hurts Me More , Its Like My Body Iz Torn
    Trying To Communicate With People In This Strange Life
    I Think My Only Way Iz Using A Knife
    From My Experience I Found Out The Death Iz The Only Escape From Life Issues
    Why Should I Kill MySelf Trying To Fit In , Its Only Makes Me Wet More Tissues
    Madness , Anger , And Hate
    Guess In This Life , Its My Only Way Through The Gate
    SomeTimez I Wish I Waz Dead So I Won't Be Here
    But The Problem iz , Death Iz SomeThing People Fear
    Should I Stop The Flowing Of These Emotions Inside Of Me And Go All Out ?
    Will There Be Some1 To Help Me If I Shout ?

    Being Cool , Happy , Or Just A Proud-Self-Man Who Talks Like Strange PoliticianZ ?
    In This World I Coudn't Find AnyOne Who Understands Me
    So I'll Be With MySelf And Be Some1 I Wanna Be
    I'm Surprized That I Still Didn't Find The Meaning Of Pain
    Even Though In This Life , Its Somthing Everyday I Gain
    I'v Did So Many Mistakes When I Waz a Kid
    These Mistakes Made Me Feel Like S***

    I Regreted Doin Some Stuff , And Not Doin Some Stuff




    nice poem ! but don`t be so hard on your self ...or were you

    What I Hate Most About This Society To Not Being Accepted
    WherEver I Go , Mostly I'm Rejected


    i hate that the most too...
    i know exactly how you feel

    the idea of death in your poem is what i didn`t like

    maybe you want to fix some of the things in that poem to make it perfect.

    but nice poem after all ...let`s see more of that dark side






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    رد: Something I Wrote A Long Time Ago When Sadness Killed Me """ Lost Soul """

    Thanks a7la_wa7da for your reply

    nice poem ! but don`t be so hard on your self ...or were you
    Thanks , as i said before i wrote this peom a long time ago
    even when I read it now I am like " wow I can't beleive i was like this before "

    Take Care !

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    WoW , god you wer realy realy depressed
    will am happy that your well now and for
    your poem i realy lihed it good job



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    thx ! , well ppl go through odreals every now and then

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    اقتباس المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة VaSh ThE sTaMpEdE مشاهدة المشاركة
    lol yah i know
    but that was a long time ago, i even forgot that i wrote this, I found it when i was organizing my computer

    thanks for the reply , Take Care !

    Oh my Gush

    What happen man
    you look so unhappy in these words
    TKt easy man
    "apre la plui le beau temp"



    nothing worth it just throw it behind

    always look at
    al la niha2ya wa ma b3daha
    No matter how much you change, you still have to pay the price for the things you've done.
    But I know I'll see you again, this side or the other
    ~ the town



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    al la niha2ya wa ma b3daha

    hahahaha , thanks man

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