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  1. #1
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    Post Wasted Message

    Hi all
    this is a message, and I like to share it with u
    may be you will find it cryptic but try to find the aim but i will not tell any one what its aim to, sorry coz it an ad hoc case


    Dear brother…
    Written with tears , sealed in my broken hurt.
    I see you in my nights, as a strong light , you seems to me I know you , but with uncharted lineament , your smile, eyes and your sound , I didn’t realize them , I desire to see you ,to hug you , but how , I just see you in my farsightedness .
    In my life I hope to glance you, tell me where are you , are you near of me? Or too far? I am carrying your burdens. I am wasted in my life without you, life is so unkind.
    Come and illuminate my life, come and I would give my life away to you, but listen , don’t irk your self, I promise you , one day I will come and acquaintanceship to you.
    Your ....

  2. #2
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    رد: Wasted Message

    may be you will find it cryptic but try to find the aim
    I read the message
    and found it really cryptic
    ^^''
    ::
    It contains some spelling , grammar & word-order mistakes
    ::
    Anyway , thanks blue eyes for sharing
    ^^
    سبحان الله وبحمده .. سبحان الله العظيم

  3. #3
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    رد: Wasted Message

    Unrequited love?

  4. #4
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    رد: Wasted Message

    اقتباس المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة katsumi san مشاهدة المشاركة
    I read the message
    and found it really cryptic
    ^^''
    ::
    It contains some spelling , grammar & word-order mistakes
    ::


    ^^


    thank you katsumi san for your clear replying

    could you tell me where I have some mistakes coz if I dont know where are them , my english language will not be much better
    thnkx a gain
    blue_eyes

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    رد: Wasted Message

    welcome brother blue eyes
    ^^

    could you tell me where I have some mistakes coz if I dont know where are them , my english language will not be much better
    -I like to share it with u
    -sorry coz it an ad hoc case

    you shouldn't write with abbreviations like ''U'' because
    it's against the rules of the English forum.
    ..
    In addition to that you have to pay attention to
    ::
    punctuation

    - find it cryptic but try to find the aim but i will
    repetition , you'd better to put
    a dot instead of the second but

    - i will not tell any one what its aim to
    I think it's better to say
    I will not tell anyone what's its aim/about its aim

    -my broken hurt
    You mean Heart=القلب

    -you seems to me I know you
    grammar mistake::
    first we don't put ''S'' to the verb with ''you'' we do
    it only when we have He/she/it
    second , the sentence have something wrong
    in its meaning
    so I guess you'd better say
    (it seems to me that I know you)

    -are you near of me
    are you near me
    without the preposition ''Of''

    -will come and acquaintanceship to you
    with instead of to
    (aquaintanceship with you)

    -Your ....
    yours


    I'm sorry for making my reply so long
    Good luck
    &
    Keep up
    ^^
    سبحان الله وبحمده .. سبحان الله العظيم

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    الصورة الرمزية Amal Sayed
    Amal Sayed غير متصل عضوه مميزه في منتدى اللغات الأجنبية
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    11-05-2007
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    رد: Wasted Message

    Asslam Alikum
    Dude Katsumi you should work as a teacher
    I mean it you are good
    and Blue eyes
    nice topic
    so you want us to find out the reason why this guy wrote the litter for his brother?
    if so here is what I think
    maybe his brother died...? or maybe he fought with his brother and now he does not know where he is
    or maybe he is just insane
    *_*'




    * سبحانك اللهم وبحمدك أشهد أن لا إله الا أنت أستغفرك وأتوب إليك *

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    اقتباس المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة katsumi san مشاهدة المشاركة
    welcome brother blue eyes

    ^^



    -I like to share it with u
    -sorry coz it an ad hoc case

    you shouldn't write with abbreviations like ''U'' because
    it's against the rules of the English forum.
    ..
    In addition to that you have to pay attention to
    ::
    punctuation

    - find it cryptic but try to find the aim but i will
    repetition , you'd better to put
    a dot instead of the second but

    - i will not tell any one what its aim to
    I think it's better to say
    I will not tell anyone what's its aim/about its aim

    -my broken hurt
    You mean Heart=القلب

    -you seems to me I know you
    grammar mistake::
    first we don't put ''S'' to the verb with ''you'' we do
    it only when we have He/she/it
    second , the sentence have something wrong
    in its meaning
    so I guess you'd better say
    (it seems to me that I know you)

    -are you near of me
    are you near me
    without the preposition ''Of''

    -will come and acquaintanceship to you
    with instead of to
    (aquaintanceship with you)

    -Your ....
    yours


    I'm sorry for making my reply so long
    Good luck
    &
    Keep up

    ^^




    ........Nice

    !! I didn't actually get the message


    ?Is it loving someone you dont know

    Anyway, thanks a lot blue_eyes

    But please pay more attention to thr rules

  8. #8
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    رد: Wasted Message

    اقتباس المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة katsumi san مشاهدة المشاركة
    welcome brother blue eyes

    ^^



    -I like to share it with u
    -sorry coz it an ad hoc case

    you shouldn't write with abbreviations like ''U'' because
    it's against the rules of the English forum.
    ..
    In addition to that you have to pay attention to
    ::
    punctuation

    - find it cryptic but try to find the aim but i will
    repetition , you'd better to put
    a dot instead of the second but

    - i will not tell any one what its aim to
    I think it's better to say
    I will not tell anyone what's its aim/about its aim

    -my broken hurt
    You mean Heart=القلب

    -you seems to me I know you
    grammar mistake::
    first we don't put ''S'' to the verb with ''you'' we do
    it only when we have He/she/it
    second , the sentence have something wrong
    in its meaning
    so I guess you'd better say
    (it seems to me that I know you)

    -are you near of me
    are you near me
    without the preposition ''Of''

    -will come and acquaintanceship to you
    with instead of to
    (aquaintanceship with you)

    -Your ....
    yours


    I'm sorry for making my reply so long
    Good luck
    &
    Keep up

    ^^
    thanks dear katsumi san for your nice replaying
    indeed most of your notes ,I know it but when you are writing something or thinking about it ,I think some times you will have some mistakes
    and thank you a gain because I have learned a new skills
    your brother
    blue_eyes

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