مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : Am Far Away ( poem or song ) by: me
Mr.FMZ
26-11-2006, 09:19 PM
بسم الله الرحمن الرحيم
This peace or writing could be called a poem. I wish readers will like it.
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I'm looking there, where you are?
I'm living there, in you dear
Am far away am far away
I used to be yours someday
You left me? Yeah
I left you? Yeah
or situations like these did it to us, it also yeah
but nothing changed in my feeling
and nothing will heal me. what a healing!
Am far away am far away
i used to be yours someday
"You are the best"...The song is saying
Words pass in mind... "Am I playing?"
Is there any need to get over it?
Will she become the one, I already left?
"I don't want I don't want"
"My heart is stock whatever yours aren't"
Whatever I am doing... I still far away
no matter keeping say .. "i was yours someday"
and today:
i promise you
For both of us, I'll chose the best
I'll enjoy a lot, having fun, a lot
I'll travel a lot, and
"I'll Love a lot"
and when I'm used to that:
Please don't show up and keep your hat
Be far away be far away
Forget you were mine someday
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By Bader
Mr.FMZ
~*RoSaMaRia*~
26-11-2006, 10:25 PM
This peace or writing could be called a poem. I wish readers will like it.
piece
I'm looking there, where you are?
where are u ?
if u mean 2 ask
but if u mean 2 wonder & pretend 2 be surprised>>>urs will be correct
but u have 2 replace
! with ?
Will she become the one, I already left?
have left
we had a rule in grammar that the verb's tense after already should be present perfect >> i don't know :o
"My heart is stock whatever yours aren't"
isn't
would u mind expressing what do u mean by stock in arabic ??
cause unfotunately i didn't get it
no matter keeping say ."
it's a bit complexed , don't u think so ?
For both of us, I'll chose the best
choose
*********
in the title it's better 2 say by myself than saying by me
*********
finally , it was really beautiful but sooooo tough
i think there is a big diference
between ur arabic method of writing & english one
best regards
مستر حريقة
26-11-2006, 11:59 PM
Well done
:) very good Mr
:D i quote part of it as a nickname
thank you
N R
:: HiDEY ::
27-11-2006, 07:14 PM
* Applause*
Very ,Very beautiful
Sounds like it was written by an inspiration
I especially loved the ending
May you be blessed
,Be safe
Mr.FMZ
04-12-2006, 11:18 AM
This peace or writing could be called a poem. I wish readers will like it.
piece
I'm looking there, where you are?
where are u ?
if u mean 2 ask
but if u mean 2 wonder & pretend 2 be surprised>>>urs will be correct
but u have 2 replace
! with ?
Will she become the one, I already left?
have left
we had a rule in grammar that the verb's tense after already should be present perfect >> i don't know :o
"My heart is stock whatever yours aren't"
isn't
would u mind expressing what do u mean by stock in arabic ??
cause unfotunately i didn't get it
no matter keeping say ."
it's a bit complexed , don't u think so ?
For both of us, I'll chose the best
choose
*********
in the title it's better 2 say by myself than saying by me
*********
finally , it was really beautiful but sooooo tough
i think there is a big diference
between ur arabic method of writing & english one
best regards
in the beginning, i want to thank you for writing this comment so i can improve my english writing.
- where you are ( you are right, it should be without ? )
- i already left ( have left ). i am not sure about that but i could use the short form of "I have" in the poem. ( I'v already left).
- my heart is stock.
you are right i am wrong here. however, in the first version of the poem, i wrote it "i am stock in you whatever you aren't".
this should solve the problem.
i am stock in you = انا عالق بكي
- No matter keeping say .. i thing it's not so complecated.
- By Me .. it is - as we say in arabic - a famous saying. so i think it is not wrong.
thank again for that
wish you the best
Bader
:: HiDEY ::
05-12-2006, 11:33 AM
No Arabic please
And thank you
(:
Mr.FMZ
05-02-2007, 10:54 AM
Well done
:) very good Mr
:D i quote part of it as a nickname
thank you
N R
I'm really sorry for all this time to reply
I just keep forgetting it
thank you very much N R and I wish if you don't mind telling me the part you quote.
thank you again
Bader
Mr.FMZ
05-02-2007, 10:55 AM
* Applause*
Very ,Very beautiful
Sounds like it was written by an inspiration
I especially loved the ending
May you be blessed
,Be safe
same sorry for you Hidy
and thank you very much for your nice words
I wish it is like it sounds
be good
Bader
wa7da_7afla
08-02-2007, 03:38 AM
It`s great :wow: >> i love it
Mr.FMZ
16-02-2007, 03:47 PM
It`s great :wow: >> i love it
thank you very much
i'm happy that you loved it
عاشقة العنابي
27-02-2007, 03:29 AM
very very nice and beautiful
iam waiting another things is great same this
Mr.FMZ
27-02-2007, 03:09 PM
very very nice and beautiful
iam waiting another things is great same this
I'm happy that you saw it beautiful ..
thank you very much
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