.:. The Fog .:.

[Levana]

Hey every one


Will as you can see this is my first topic ever


Its something i wrote last week, I hope you like it


and I’d love to hear your thoughts about it


One more thing am new to writing English


so if you see any mistakes please do correct me


- - - - -





http://www.arb-up.com/files/arb-up-Dec1/dZC40042.jpg




The Fog




its dark and formless



it roams the earth alone



just like me the fog is



we both roam unknown



and un-tamed by the laws of man



we just simply exist

















:worried:so what do you think

[Foxy.Rabbit]

,hey Levana

I just read it
it's a bit short
but it sounds really promising


I would love to read more of you writings
;)

.foXy

[مستر حريقة]

Will as you can see this is my first topic ever


:D Glad you decided to share something

Nice poem ... nice beginning

But what I dont understand somehow is



and un-tamed by the laws of man


:flute:

^.^ Thank you

[dream catcher]

a bit too short
and a bit creepy
.
.
nice start Levana..
just show us more of them poems
ok
?

[Levana]

I just read it
it's a bit short
but it sounds really promising


I would love to read more of you writings
;)




:09:yes it is short i just couldn't think of anything more to write








But what I dont understand somehow is



and un-tamed by the laws of man


:flute:




it means that we (the fog and i) are uncontrolled by laws of man










a bit too short
and a bit creepy










i agree that it is short but creepy??? why





:Dand thanks for your comments



_

[dream catcher]

lo0ol..
just saw this..
.
.
creepy because of the sense of loneliness in it
.
.
:(

[Levana]

oh.. will loneliness is not that creepy

[hard times]

hi
me too i'm new in this forum
it is a great peice
i hope you the best
you remebered me of something i've read it once.the Absurdism Approach of literature
it is full of sadness
if you like this Genre of Literature or writing you can read to Samuel Beckette
See you

[Levana]

hi
:D hiiiz



me too i'm new in this forum
:wink: will welcome you're guna like it her



it is a great peice i hope you the best
thanx bro



you remebered me of something i've read it once
..!?:bigeyes: really



the Absurdism Approach of literature it is full of sadness
if you like this Genre of Literature or writing
you can read to Samuel Beckette
^^ will do



See you
c ya