End Of My Story

[TouGH G]

Salam Alykum

I wnana start here by a poem i've wrote

so don't be afraid 2 put ur opinion here i don't bite

i hope u like it all

I look at you and I feel sick.

I look at you and I regret.

Stop! I can’t look at you.

You feel pride when I look at you.

I thought you‘d understand this look in my eyes.

Or understand these feelings inside.

I have a cause to look at you.

You have wide beautiful eyes.

Capture me deep deep inside.

I just hit around, as I get high.

It’s feels like flying over the sky.

Swimming with birds and clouds

I sought around these beautiful eyes.

It’s tells me a lot about your life.

There’s a misery hide behind these eyes.

It’s fills with mysteries and cries.

Many secrets you hide from people like I

Its stoles the glow from your eyes

But I don’t care and I’m not wondering why.

You just hurt my feelings inside.

By ignoring me all the time

And not give me a chance to say hi.

Thank god a few friends of mine.

Took me from this darkness side

Helped me and brought me to life.

Before I lose my mind

Now I know you’ll never be mine.

Now my wounds will heal.

It looks like I've saved.

From a devil in human shape

Ignoring his favorite game

And closing doors on people face

It’s like a duty faith.

But you know! Forgetting is bliss.

It’s a solution for a problem like this.

Do you think you’ll always be in my mind?

Swimming around in my thoughts

I’ll write everything in my chest.

It’s another way to forget this.

Step by step, I'll put you in the recycle bin.

And put to this story an END.



PEACE

[TouGH G]

At least some1 give me a sign 2 know if it's good or not :|


PEACE

[المكاويه]

Hi brother
sorry that i didnt read ur piece
but i just get bored reading long writings
but urs is coooooooooool
specially the end
the recycling bin is a cute idea
just u need to pay attention to the rhyme and rhythm
الوزن و القافيه
besides taking care of grammar
over all its nice and interesting
welcome here
accept my warm regards

[Nnoshah]

your peom is great realy

it seem from your feeling

i liked it

keep in that brother

and we r waiting your great peoms

thanx for this wonderful peom

see ya

[TouGH G]

Hi brother





sorry that i didnt read ur piece
but i just get bored reading long writings
just u need to pay attention to the rhyme and rhythm
besides taking care of grammar
over all its nice and interesting
welcome here
accept my warm regards

Oh finally

Let me c LONG r u sure? I thought it's short
about "rhyme and rhythm" I will pay attention in the next
GRAMMAR hmm.. can u tell me where's my mistakes plz

Thx المكاويه
PEACE

[TouGH G]

حبيبة هيسوكا

thx 4 ur words

and don't worry, anything new i'll put it here

but i hope i c more and more ppl here

thx again

PEACE

[NaughtY AngeL]

Hey there new guy, you're most welcome here

Nice poem, though it's actually sad

Sorry things didn't work out between you two
Be strong
And keep it up

And as Makaweyya said pay attention on both grammar and rhyme n rhythm next time


Ciao for now

[TouGH G]

NaughtY AngeL

thx 4 stepping by and ur words

i'll do my best on the next

PEACE

[المكاويه]

Salam Alykum

I wnana start here by a poem i've wrote

so don't be afraid 2 put ur opinion here i don't bite

i hope u like it all

I look at you and I feel sick.

I look at you and I regret.

Stop! I can’t look at you.

You feel pride when I look at you.

I thought you‘d understand this look in my eyes.

Or understand these feelings inside.

I have a cause to look at you.

You have wide beautiful eyes.

Capture me deep deep inside.

I just hit around, as I get high.

It’s feels like flying over the sky.

Swimming with birds and clouds

I sought around these beautiful eyes.

It’s tells me a lot about your life.

There’s a misery hide behind these eyes.

It’s fills with mysteries and cries.

Many secrets you hide from people like I

Its stoles the glow from your eyes

But I don’t care and I’m not wondering why.

You just hurt my feelings inside.

By ignoring me all the time

And not give me a chance to say hi.

Thank god a few friends of mine.

Took me from this darkness side

Helped me and brought me to life.

Before I lose my mind

Now I know you’ll never be mine.

Now my wounds will heal.

It looks like I've saved.

From a devil in human shape

Ignoring his favorite game

And closing doors on people face

It’s like a duty faith.

But you know! Forgetting is bliss.

It’s a solution for a problem like this.

Do you think you’ll always be in my mind?

Swimming around in my thoughts

I’ll write everything in my chest.

It’s another way to forget this.

Step by step, I'll put you in the recycle bin.

And put to this story an END.



PEACE

Hi again
these underlined parts have the mistakes
wish u can figure them out, to correct urself
if u couldnt,, just ask
see u later

[TouGH G]

hmm..

I'll c about it

thx again and if i need help, I'm sure u'll be here

PEACE

[spider girl]

I’ll write everything in my chest

It’s another way to forget this.

Step by step, I'll put you in the recycle bin.

And put to this story an END

oh waaaaw



great poem wallah ..really i like waaaaaaayed

thank u so much brother

ya36eek el 3afya

^^ and am waiting 4 more

salaaaaaaam