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    الموضوع: Undesirable

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      Undesirable

      Once upon a saddened moon I was born
      I wasn't the first nor the last
      but
      Father said I was so quiet and when I was born

      I felt good, I thought it was because I was such a good girl even when I was born I didn't make mother feel bad

      and then she'll treasure me the most
      but
      something started whispering to me

      " you're unimportant, maybe your coming to this world isn't that noticeable either"

      the sound comes from a very old closet, it's very scary so I never get near it..

      so I chose to ignore the voice

      I kept being a good girl at home and in school, sometimes I feel a very strange thing is watching me when I'm out of school..

      I get a very cold feeling.. scary too

      the leaves are falling...

      I found my mom crying in her room, I stood in front of her and she didn't notice me

      I tried comforting her but she doesn't seem to notice.. I touch her hands but she doesn't respond..

      the words of the voice echoes again.. and again..

      why am I being ignored by my own mother..?

      Father enters the room without noticing anything strange, picks up his wallet and goes out again..

      "undesirable child of darkness and sin, open thy box of unyielding secrets"

      the voice echoes yet again..

      and I think why is mother ignoring me ever since I've seen the light

      "I'm sorry mother, I just wanted to make you feel better"

      she doesn't recognize any other presence in the room, so I left..

      back to my room, in front of the old closet...

      its doors are trembling with every step I take,,

      I open it.. and a bright flash of light Illuminates the room..

      and a picture appears that has my mother in it laughing with another man..

      another picture appears for her dying on the hospital's with tears in her eyes..

      father appears beside her with a grim look on his face...

      mother is dead?

      it can't be... this is a lie

      the voice comes to life again

      "by now you must have known the truth of your existence, I assure you.. your father knows but he doesn't show his resentment to you..

      even though he knows you're innocent he doesn't feel that
      "fatherly" towards you

      you poor bastard child,... so undesirable.. so sad

      everything disappears including the closet..

      and I feel like crying, I feel extremely depressed

      but at least now I know why am I being ignored and left behind

      and it hurts even more...



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      Thumbs up رد: Undesirable

      WooooW


      Nice story ... nice dream I guess

      Well, as sound as a bell

      Thank you sister ... beautifull other topic from you


      Waiting to see more

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      Foxy.Rabbit غير متصل صاحب أفضل ثاني تصميم بالقسم الايطالي
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      رد: Undesirable


      ok, .. I don't want to sound stupid but..
      I didn't quite get it .. I'm a bit lost here

      *help*


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      رد: Undesirable

      you don't have to be nice Nakkash, I was trying to relive some of my memories and they're not nice

      and I'm sorry if didn't make any sense to you Foxy I can understand why

      I wrote the lazy version please forgive that

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      رد: Undesirable

      ^
      oh please don't !!
      I'll read it again, .. but what lazy version you're talking about ??



      hope to read more of your work

      best of luck,



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      رد: Undesirable

      geez..

      that is heartbreaking..
      not really the best thing to read in the morning, but I just saw it..
      .
      .
      you wrote this
      ??

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      رد: Undesirable


      its sad, a bit depressing but i liked it as a story

      good luck with every thing

      and like foxy said we hope to read more of your work




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      رد: Undesirable

      hey you girl who wrote this story

      why you just did so....?r

      do you know that i will live in misery now because of your hell story ... huh

      you have no idea
      سبحان الله و بحمده
      عدد خلقه
      ورضا نفسه
      و زنة عرشه
      و مداد كلماته
      سبحان الله و بحمده ... سبحان الله العظيم
      جرب هذا الرابط لن تندم ... صدقني لن تندم
      http://www.shbab1.com/2minutes.htm


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      رد: Undesirable

      hi.what a wonderful short story is it
      you really made what they call the Catharasis.it's when you make other feel pity and sad
      thank you for your touching letters and your high sensitivity of your heart
      go ahead i like to see more of your subject Good luck

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