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    الموضوع: Immortal marks of mortification

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      Immortal marks of mortification

      In a still night under the celestial garment a glass-shaking shriek devoured the quite dreams of the household. Her parents rushed to her as she trembles under the covers, even though it's not the first time but her mother asks the same question" what's wrong?" the girl answered angrily "what do you think is wrong! It's the same damned nightmare" with her last utterance she broke down in tears, as seemingly she is reaching her faint limits.

      In her mind she knows that she only saw those dark hands again reaching for her body, yet every time she sees those ungodly hands she goes hysterical.

      Nothing worked, no psychiatrists ever found out why she's having these nightmares, nor her parents' tireless efforts of making her feel better ever worked to prevent the evil sight of those ungodly pair of sin.

      But, there is one thing she knows for sure, that after these nightmares started she started wearing more reserved clothes. Covering almost all of her bod but her face and hands.

      Despite being mocked by her classmates, friends and such she thought as if those hands are waiting somewhere for an opportunity to taint her body.

      After coming back from school, she entered as her mother is speaking happily on the phone, somehow it stirred some interest in the girl.

      Walking around in circles waiting for her mother to finish talking she felt dizzy for a moment and entered a trance-like state where she is wearing an icy-white gown on top of a small boat, she felt serene as she looked around the lake, but a distant cawing made her cringe and wake up to reality while her mother is yet to end her conversation.

      The mother finally finished, with a cheerful face she announced the return of her older brother "your uncle is finally coming back, it's been almost ten years when went to study medicine abroad, oh I am so proud" the girl smiled instantly without saying a word.

      During the night before her uncle's anticipated return, she had the strangest dream, a crow flying away with her white gown as she was at the boat leaving her body exposed, but she didn't feel any sense of shame. A mirror rose from the lake showing a reflection of her bare physique, and there it was.. multiple prints of a dark hand covering certain parts of her skin.

      Realizing what this dream must have referred to, she suddenly gained access to certain blocked memories of her childhood, as unpleasant as those memories were she didn't scream or call for help, but cried silently under the covers.. -finally I can live without fear-she thought to herself.

      In the next day, every one gathered in the house preparing a reception party for her uncle with a large banner saying "Welcome back Doc" the girl surprised her family by wearing less preserved clothes, with a .certain glow coming out from her eyes

      When the whole family gathered for dinner, and the guest of honor is being rained upon by words, either praise or asking about his journey of success, the girl kept her eyes locked-on her uncle until he looked at her, then quickly shifting his eyesight as if he didn't recognize her, but he looked again trying to figure out who is this "pretty" face as he thought to himself. Then he uttered " You are.."

      She answered swiftly "Yes I'm your niece!" adding a heartless giggle to it

      he was boggled to know that he forgot about her, but then trying to save whatever left of his face " Look at you, you have certainly outgrown your cousins, even though you're so young" releasing a laugh in hopes she respond the same. With only nodding to his previous remark she said "So you "fix" bodies now? that must be something, no?"

      After trying to be moderate he then excused himself from the table and before he left the house.. the girl followed him and shook his hand in a way that surprised the uncle "easy on me it's as if you're the guy here"

      The girl smiled and then said "You don't remember me do you?"

      He stood silent not knowing what to say

      The girl's eyes cold arrows struck him before she continued " Let me tell you one thing, make sure you always wear your gloves...
      because everything you touch turns black and decays"

      Many days have passed since then, and with every social occasion that the family have, the uncle has an excuse for not showing up, and every one in the family thinks either he is too arrogant to attend or there is something wrong that happened that nobody knows about.

      As the years passed by the doctor never married, losing his social credibility and ending up a Misanthrope

      One night he was found dead in his room with his hands severed on the bloody bed.. the hands had gloves on them and on each glove there was written "Unforgivable"

      The END

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      رد: Immortal marks of mortification

      As dark and depressing as ever..
      once again, you leave me puzzled
      not the most joyful thing but..
      definitely appealing
      .
      .
      you've a wild imagination..
      next time try writing about something ...umm, cheerful..?

      how about..."Fairies"..?
      lol...would love to see how would you do that..XD
      bet they'll all die


      .
      .
      now, don't you go Berserk on me..
      I'm just messing with ya..


      loved the title by the way


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      Foxy.Rabbit غير متصل صاحب أفضل ثاني تصميم بالقسم الايطالي
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      ^
      good one, dream katchup



      intresting opening, and good use of characters
      you do have a wide imagination, and I would
      love to read more of your work


      Bbye,

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      رد: Immortal marks of mortification

      • Ketchup boy
      • Dark, maybe.. but depressing that's a bit much I was only expressing some images it may not be cheerful but it can be true, or at least eerie but not depressing.
      • Foxy
      • Oh, stop indulging my ego hehe, but thanks anyway
      • and Ketchup, my next thread will be cheerful.. unless I get mad at the fairies then...
      التعديل الأخير تم بواسطة Woeful ; 25-02-2008 الساعة 05:35 PM سبب آخر: what the **** is up with the dots I can't move them

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      رد: Immortal marks of mortification

      oh no please no more threads about fear and darkness

      for the god sake Woeful or i jump over effeil tower i swear the god


      yes you have a very wide imagination but only in sad stuff . . . ! .r
      hope that you can make a truce with the fairies ... realy
      and thanks anyway
      good luck
      سبحان الله و بحمده
      عدد خلقه
      ورضا نفسه
      و زنة عرشه
      و مداد كلماته
      سبحان الله و بحمده ... سبحان الله العظيم
      جرب هذا الرابط لن تندم ... صدقني لن تندم
      http://www.shbab1.com/2minutes.htm


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      الصورة الرمزية Amanda~
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      nice keep it up Bro
      amazing you really have your own style and good ability in writing,,


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