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    الموضوع: The Rhyme

    1. #1
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      Post The Rhyme

      Hi every one,

      I have a little talent in writing poetry, so i wanted to share some of my poems with you so that i can gain more experience by hearing out your opinions
      i hope you like it

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      The Rhyme

      Every day, every night
      Find my way to the light
      Not too shiny, not too bright
      But in the end, sit right

      Listen to me, i'll start to rhyme
      Don't stop me, it's not a crime
      Express yourself, say what's inside
      Confess every thing, don't try to hide

      If i thought now, i'd like to say
      I have a big dept, no one can pay
      To stay in school, don't be a fool
      Just study, 'cause buddy
      It's the ultimate rule !

      They say, it's really soon
      But they, sleep the after noon
      I stay, up late, just to hate my school, and i state
      I've realized it too late !

      like every one, i took the bait
      i wont argue, it's my fate !

      so again , let's start the rhyme
      don't leave, not yet, it's not the time...

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      i hope that this poem is good enough, so thank you very much for reading

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      رد: The Rhyme

      Not a bad start, it sounds nice but it needs some adjustment.
      You are missing a rhythm here.
      Maybe reading more poems will help improving your skills, try doing that.
      This World is Rotten

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      رد: The Rhyme

      I have a little talent in writing poetry
      Your wrong you have alot of talent
      thanks for sharing the rhyme with us
      god bless you.

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      رد: The Rhyme

      it's nice as agent ryan said :"it's not bad start"
      MAY GODNESS BLESS U

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      رد: The Rhyme

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      I think that is very good Rhyme
      Although we are not experts in this area
      Thank you to our participation this poem
      You are really creative


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