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    الموضوع: My dream..

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      Arrow My dream..

      Hello everyone, How are you all? ..
      In fact I like to write poems in english and I have some attempts, I would be very grateful if you give me your observation about them.. In this post I'll put my first poem which I wrote it in my first year at college, I hope you like it..



      Now I'll leave you with my first attempt..
      My dream !!



      I see ourselves, walking hand in hand

      Leaving our foot prints

      In the soft, sunset sand

      *** *** ***

      I see myself, looking at you

      Knowing I love you so

      Hoping you love me as much too

      *** *** ***

      I see you so gentle and fair

      The full moon light

      Shining of your golden hair

      *** *** ***

      I see you in the noon,

      My beautiful dream girl,

      Lighter than the sun and moon

      *** *** ***

      I see you in the night

      As a shining star in a dark sky

      Waiting me as your knight

      *** *** ***

      I see ourselves, sharing our hearts

      Knowing we are together

      Even though distance keeps us apart

      *** *** ***

      I see ourselves, living our dreams

      Trusting in each other

      Feeling what true love means

      *** *** ***

      I see our worlds becoming one

      Feeling amazed and blessed

      For what God has provided and done

      *** *** ***

      Then sadly I awake with the morning light

      But know I'll be with you again

      When I go to sleep tonight..

      *** *** ***




      Life without love as a year without spring

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      Rami83

      hi brother

      i really like ur amazing poem

      in fact u have a good imagination and warm feeling

      i noticed two grammatical mistakes

      The first one


      I see you in the noon,
      it should be
      I see you at noon

      The second One


      I see you in the night
      it should be
      I see you at night


      hope u get these notices and do more beautiful one



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      Dear brother another one

      In fact I can't give you your due in full, I have published this poem in a lot of forums and everyone said, WOW GREAT .. no one tell me about these grammatical mistakes... Thank you dear bro. Thank you for everything very much..



      Love

      Rami
      Life without love as a year without spring

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      ممتاز!

      شعرك رائع جداً و يأتي لي بالخيال الجميل

      ولكن.... آمل أن يتحقق كلّ الحلم الوردي

      I hope all the dreams come true


      الحياة مملوءة بالصدفات...
      قد يتقاطع خطان متوازيان يوما ما......

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      مشاركة: My dream..

      Thank you dear Bahia for your kind reply


      please accept all my love and regards

      Life without love as a year without spring

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      مشاركة: My dream..

      hi
      its amazing ,,i have already read it twice,,truly,,,so wonderful.
      you are good

      thanX

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      اقتباس المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Rami83
      Thank you dear Bahia for your kind reply




      please accept all my love and regards






      ThQ for ur blisses dear Rami

      ( I'm so surprised....beacause u knew my name..)

      Actually,
      I like this peom very much
      by two reasons:

      The first reason I 've alreay mentioned it in last reply
      ur poem brings me infinite & bright imaginations


      The second reason
      I had thought that the emotions of the people of different countries
      and regions was different
      but
      after reading this poem
      I found there r same things
      & feelings &
      emotions
      between the people of diffrent countries..

      سبق لي أن ظنّت
      أنّ الشعور بين الشعوب
      في مختلف الدول و المناطق
      مختلفة كثيرة ...
      و لكن بعد قرأة شعرك ...
      وجدت الشيء النفسي بين شعب الدول المختلفة
      و قد وجدت جوابا في قلبي...

      At last
      I hope a dream isn't merely a dream,
      but a motive force to realize happy life ...


      Best wishes for u
      祝福你


      الحياة مملوءة بالصدفات...
      قد يتقاطع خطان متوازيان يوما ما......

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      اقتباس المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة TRY NO RACE
      hi

      its amazing ,,i have already read it twice,,truly,,,so wonderful.
      you are good

      thanX

      am so happy that lo liked my poem

      Thank you dear TRY NO RACE for your reply

      Love
      Life without love as a year without spring

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      اقتباس المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة 樱花乱舞
      ThQ for ur blisses dear Rami


      ( I'm so surprised....beacause u knew my name..)

      Actually,
      I like this peom very much
      by two reasons:

      The first reason I 've alreay mentioned it in last reply
      ur poem brings me infinite & bright imaginations


      The second reason
      I had thought that the emotions of the people of different countries
      and regions was different
      but
      after reading this poem
      I found there r same things
      & feelings &
      emotions
      between the people of diffrent countries..

      سبق لي أن ظنّت
      أنّ الشعور بين الشعوب
      في مختلف الدول و المناطق
      مختلفة كثيرة ...
      و لكن بعد قرأة شعرك ...
      وجدت الشيء النفسي بين شعب الدول المختلفة
      و قد وجدت جوابا في قلبي...

      At last
      I hope a dream isn't merely a dream,
      but a motive force to realize happy life ...


      Best wishes for u
      祝福你

      Hi Bahia

      Thank you again for your another reply which made me really so glad, in fact am so happy that you liked my first attempt of poems which I wrote it in 1999 and I wrote a lot after it, but it still take that espacial standing in my soul..

      I really wonder that you had thought that the emotions of the people of different countries and regions was different.. Dear friend, you have to know that human.. any human, Arabic, chinese, European, Muslim, Christian, Buddhist and any one have something called LOVE.. No one in this world have not got love, cause if we can't love, we will not live (this is in my opinion).. So, we all live in a world has a lot of countries and a lot of races and descents, but human still human.. Do you get my idea? .. By the way I knew your name from your very fantastic topic about china which you supply us with very important information and funny, beautiful pics. Am really interested of china and its people, and I want to know a lot about it cause I have a lots of friends in several districts in China. So, I'll meet you soon at your topic..



      Finally, please accept all my love and regards...
      Life without love as a year without spring

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      hi rami.1st of all i thank GOD to know a talented one in poetry coz i like poetry soooo much.i really congratulate u for ur great ability of reflecting emotions.i hope to be a friend of urs and hope u read my poem too.am the poet of confidence fight.hope u like it.
      MELANCHOLY

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      Hi Rami, Masha'Allah your poem is nice and refelcts how sensitive and romantic you are, but there is something that I think if you put in mind would make your poem much more beautiful

      Instead of repeating the phrase (I see) at the beginning of every line you can put something else. For example you can use I imagine, I visualize, I fantasize, I dream of, or I picture. I think using different phrases will make your poem more amazing and affective.

      Good luck

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