Darkness and thorns, A poem

[Flamer]

Hello Everyone, I'm new to this beautiful forum and I just wanted to participate in the English section,

I have wrote a not-so-good peom two months ago, and I finally think it can be published on line

So, without further ado, here's your poem

Staring ahead
Not understanding what that creature is saying

Nothing but scribbles I see

With my tired aging eyes

As the time flies



The curtain falls

On the ruminants of the daily play

The scribbles turn to walls

As I, in the dream, sway



Now there she stood

With her most entrancing eyes

In a timeless realm

She stands and cries



Wind blows, and thunder roars

Clashing in their ancient wars

And then I glimpse in the brief light

Her figure dancing in delight



She loved the storm

And brewed the rain

With shimmering eyes

And infinite pain



Thorns grow and scratch her feet

As if signaling her defeat

Yet at the thorn’s source a dirge played

Bringing from the past a cursed blade



Against the wind and the pouring rain

I pull the sword to kill her pain

The dream stopped and alas

Now it was the end of class

I hope you all like it

[مستر حريقة]

:icon6: hi flamer

ur so welcome to this forum with ur perfect poem

hope u keep with publishing ur poems

and i liked it

go further

[Lips Licker]

She loved the storm

And brewed the rain

With shimmering eyes

And infinite pain



Thorns grow and scratch her feet

As if signaling her defeat

Yet at the thorn’s source a dirge played

Bringing from the past a cursed blade



Against the wind and the pouring rain

I pull the sword to kill her pain

The dream stopped and alas

Now it was the end of class

Thanx Flamer that was a good one

keep it up





ur brother
Lips Licker

[Flamer]

Thank you dear brothers for your kind replies,
I'm still a biggener though

And may I say, you both have verry intiguing names

[المكاويه]

WOW

a great poem,, indeed
specially that it uses a kind of a cmoplex language
not a simple one,, anyway


but still
it is very nice

i liked this part

Against the wind and the pouring rain

I pull the sword to kill her pain

The dream stopped and alas

Now it was the end of class

it was a dream,, then
looooooooooooooool
and in the class
u seem to be against classes ans schools

**********
thank u brother for this piece
keep it up
and u r most welcome in this forum with us

[Flamer]

WOW


a great poem,, indeed
specially that it uses a kind of a cmoplex language
not a simple one,, anyway


but still
it is very nice

i liked this part





it was a dream,, then
looooooooooooooool
and in the class
u seem to be against classes ans schools

**********
thank u brother for this piece
keep it up
and u r most welcome in this forum with us

Thank you very much for your kind reply
Actually, I'm not really against classes or school, it's just that I thought that it would make an interesting ending (At least to me it does ) And i wasn't really in the mood to write a full story. Maybe I'll do that later, but I hust don't feel like doing it right now

Thank you again

[Kubaj]

Bravo ! Bravo

Wind blows, and thunder roars

Clashing in their ancient wars

absolutely brilliant