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الموضوع: A Cry In The Night

  1. #1
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    30-06-2005
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    A Cry In The Night

    inspiration struck again and this was what i came with
    I'm not sure about the title...i might change it when i think of a better one
    before you read:
    if you want, you can start reading and think of yourself as this person in this piece..and see how you would feel
    enjoy



    As the shadows of the night fly everywhere

    And the sound of life has vanished in the darkness



    There you are, wandering in this sea of blackness

    Only hearing your own wounded heart's beat



    As your wounds get wider and wider

    You can't see blood but the pain is growing stronger and stronger



    Silent tears fall down your burning cheeks

    Yes, you let them fall..

    And then, who would notice them?



    Can't find your way

    Lost…

    Your body can't pull through anymore

    Weak



    You feel your breath getting heavier and heavier..



    Tripping with a dead body lying on the ground…

    Your eyes are widening

    Frightened



    This once strong body of yours collapses on this dead land

    Knowing there's only death flying in this ominous sky



    Empty of all memories of happiness

    Only images of sorrow creeping into your mind



    Realizing you're alone here

    Every hope of surviving is drifting away

    You know the end of this misery is coming…



    Moments later

    A loud cry rises in the air

    Announcing the end of another life


    Toboe

  2. #2
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    20-12-2004
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    Never Too Far Away
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    مشاركة: A Cry In The Night

    Beautiful
    the way you put it was beautiful
    specially the ending

    Empty of all memories of happiness

    Only images of sorrow creeping into your mind

    Realizing you're alone here

    Every hope of surviving is drifting away

    You know the end of this misery is coming…


    thank you very much
    Keep it up sis
    A Prince Who Wishes To Achieve Great Things
    Must Learn To Deceive


    Niccolo Machiavelli


  3. #3
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    18-04-2002
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    مشاركة: A Cry In The Night

    Hi dear sister
    How are you?

    Incredible ......
    So nice.......
    Very very Dark.......

    I don't know which one suite your poem the most , but the one thing that I'm

    sure about is that your poem is unbleavible , amazing ,and one of the best

    poems I've ever read.

    You are very talanted
    You chose the right words and the right expresion

    And when it comes to expres sorrow and pain you are unstopable

    You know while I was reading your masterpiece I imagened your well-made scene
    It was very dark , really

    It was like watching an oscar-winning movie

    Well....., even if I keep typing for a handred years , it does not matter
    Because I can not describe how much I liked your poem

    So,


    Thank you very much sis

    And I can not wait to read another poem from you


    God bless you


    Bye

  4. #4
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    مشاركة: A Cry In The Night

    اقتباس المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Lips Licker
    Beautiful
    the way you put it was beautiful
    specially the ending

    I'm glad you liked it


    thank you very much
    Keep it up sis
    Thanks for taking time to pass by

    اقتباس المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة psx-ps3-ps3-ps4
    Hi dear sister
    How are you?

    I'm great..hopefully you too

    Thank you very much sis
    Thank you for reading it
    And I can not wait to read another poem from you
    when inspiration strikes again
    God bless you
    Bye
    you too, see ya


  5. #5
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    11-04-2005
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    مشاركة: A Cry In The Night

    it's realy nice i wish u put more like that and thx

  6. #6
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    30-06-2005
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    مشاركة: A Cry In The Night

    اقتباس المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة mkspeed
    it's realy nice i wish u put more like that and thx
    Thanks for reading it

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